Using the "Wordiness and Redundancy" Power Point (screen 2 – 3), I began class by reviewing the definition of “wordiness” and “redundancy.”
Reminding students that eliminating “wordiness and redundancy” is part of revising, I asked for suggestions of how it could be done. Several students gave suggestions then we reviewed screen 4 in the power point.
Practicing as a class with screens 5 – 12 in the power point, we discussed the reasons why these sentences were redundant or wordy.
One of my colleagues created a practice worksheet. Instead of using this as a worksheet for individual practice, I decided to incorporate it into the power point and use it as a class discussion, noting the reasons why sentences were wordy or redundant.
Students took out their most recent piece of writing and revised focusing on redundancy and wordiness.