Mary Lynch HIGHLAND JR HIGH SCHOOL, MESA, AZ
7th Grade ELA : Unit #2 - Writing : Lesson #11

Wordiness and Redundancy

Objective: SWBAT express ideas concisely, recognizing and eliminating wordiness and redundancy.
Standards: L.7.3a
Subject(s): English / Language Arts
60 minutes
1 Review - 5 minutes

Using the "Wordiness and Redundancy" Power Point (screen 2 – 3), I began class by reviewing the definition of “wordiness” and “redundancy.”

 Reminding students that eliminating “wordiness and redundancy” is part of revising, I asked for suggestions of how it could be done.  Several students gave suggestions then we reviewed screen 4 in the power point.

2 Practice - 15 minutes

Practicing as a class with screens 5 – 12 in the power point, we discussed the reasons why these sentences were redundant or wordy.

Source
Developing a Conceptual Understanding

One of my colleagues created a practice worksheet. Instead of using this as a worksheet for individual practice, I decided to incorporate it into the power point and use it as a class discussion, noting the reasons why sentences were wordy or redundant.

3 Application - 20 minutes

Students took out their most recent piece of writing and revised focusing on redundancy and wordiness.